Friday, May 14, 2010


Brian is wonderfully adept at story-telling, that I hesitate to do this--  I hope that it does not come through as impertinence on my part. I had written a comment on Brian's "55" and dontcha know? It came out to exactly 58 words, so I wrote a "fiction" to his "non-fiction". Here is Brian's original, my 55 follows his:

pale & bloated,
he lay,
a great, dead walrus,
in the front yard,
little hearts boxers
cutting into his abundance.

it was always me, me, me...
she said, he said,
police bagging her
cast iron skillet.

none questioned how
her response
was less selfish,
except their son,
laying in the impression
left in the uncut grass.

steveroni's "55"...

(Brian, you are indeed a MASTER teller of tales. Were you on that road to Canterbury?)

Fade into..."But, Judge Howell, you do not understand...he was running, and WHACK! ran right into my skillet..."

"WHY did I have a skillet in the front yard? Hell man, I was swatting mosquitoes..."

I rest my case!

Flash Fiction Friday 55 is hosted by G-Man


drybottomgirl said...

This puts a funny twist on a rather grusome outcome. I'm from Wisconsin and we raise big skeeters here. My 55 is up and I hope you have an awesome weekend!

Syd said...

I like it--a good way to exercise the arms and get rid of a few skeeters.

Kay said...

it happens... :)

JStar said...

LOL...I see everyone is feeding off of eachothers 55's today...GREAT!!!!!

g-man said...

There! Don't you feel much better?
I knew you would.
Excellent Addendum Stevo, You Rock The Sunshine State.
Thank you for succumbing to my whining, you are very diplomatic!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

This is so COOL...
You got inspired by Brian...
and I have one , inspired by Mr. G!
well done!

Mine is here
Have you an AWESOME weekend!

Monkey Man said...

A grand follow up to Brian's 55.

My 55 is HERE .

Jingle said...

how creative,
you and Brian,
both are cool writers...
beautiful correspondence and
what fun to read both here!

Bananii said...

Oh! Brian is good :) So are you!!!

I like it :P

(ooh now I get the post about love :) then feel welcome to go and take a look whenerver you may like )

Sam Liu said...

Wonderfully ingenious, Steveroni! This is one of the cleverest and most effective 55s I've read, the suffusion of two brilliant story tellers - an assured recipe for success :)

Prayer Girl said...

G-Man whined and you responded and I'm glad you did.

"pale & bloated, he lay, a great, dead walrus....that's a pretty heavy and dark image in the head.

You lightened it up.

I loved both Brian's and your 55.


Nevine said...

What an interesting exercise, Steveroni! And with an awesome outcome! I like this 55 lots. It's got a nice lull to it... Just in time for the weekend. Have yourself a good one... weekend that is! ;-)


Enchanted Oak said...

Ha ha ha! Thanks for the funny contribution to the 55 day.

Katherine said...

That would be a double dunk by Brian & yourself. A clever 55 Steve!

RNSANE said...

Now that is a great excuse for a murder, steveroni!! I've heard just about everything in my 21 years as a forensic nurse but this is something new...sounds like something your'd find in a Carl Hiassen novel...have you read him,by the way, being from FL? I like his humorous forensic tales.

Scott said...

lol, too funny Steve!

Cindy said...


Ces said...

I do not get this but it's because my brain is full of ink tonight. In response to your comment: Thank you Steve. I read that. I read what she wrote. I do not know what she is talking about! Happy birthday and happy anniversary to you too. I have lived with five Geminis in New Jersey. The world did not end. In fact it started!

grete said...

Wow - first those 55 words - then the next. 110 words that made my day! Thank you!

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Ahhh the story changes and evolves here :)

Just Be Real said...

Stevie this post made me smile. Thanks.

Brian Miller said...

nice steve...lol. thanks for playing off me again...it makes it a rather three stooges moment..i hope you had a wonderful weekend and a great week ahead...

Jingle said...


9 awards,
thanks for the beautiful comments.
I am glad that you accepted two poetry awards.
Happy Tuesday!

izzy said...

I have struggled with 'Haiku'
in its many forms for years. Maybe
55's another way to transition!